This is good, but I'd suggest adding it to the General Blackout folder instead of the Featured one. One of the things about blackout is that part of the idea is writing about something different than what's on the page - changing it in some way. I feel like this - while wonderful - is a condensed version of the page itself. That being said, love changes time is a brilliant line and you show a lot of real potential.
Thank you! I wasn't quite sure where I should put it...sI just plopped it in there lol! I moved it! Yeah...I'm real new at Blackout poety...I did get a $0.50 book from an antique store that I'm practiceing in right now! I'll try to keep the thought of changing the meaning from the origional meaning! Thanks so much for your comment and your helpful help on this!
You're really welcome, anytime. It's fine to submit to Featured when you think you've got a piece that fits there. If I don't accept, it's not because the piece isn't good - it's just not quite extraordinary yet. Bearing that in mind, I think that for a newcomer, you're exhibiting a lot of natural talent. Feel free to submit to Featured and General anytime you want to, and por favor try the contest! It's gonna be really cool!
I think it you did a better job then the people who wrote, it is hard to sense the deeps of the first one because it uses so many words have have little meaning but you highlighted the deepness words that reflected in its true meaning